Tuesday, June 18, 2013

The War Part One By: Jack kramer

The War Part One.

January,16 2017. Chapter One The Flames
The flames yes the flames the heat was unbearable i couldn't stand it much longer! I was surrounded by flames i thought surely i was gonna die. Then the thought came back! My Brother, Abe he was trapped. Thats why i was here! I heard the call of his voice the faint frantic, "Jack!" coming with in this
flame. I ran through the flames i felt my skin burning the heat! The heat! No i wouldn't make it Abe would be trapped! It made me sick to the bone to think of him trapped in the flame ablaze and crying and screaming! I had to save him! I ran and it felt like forever but finally i found him! I took him in my arms, and RAN.my vision was blurred and i thought "How did i get her".
                                                                                                                                                                          December, 12 2016. Chapter Two The Handgun
It was cold and clammy out side i was in my room looking out the window "Life sucks" I said to my self. And then i look at the road blocks and the chicken wire. we were quarantined but also kinda captives. The russians attacked the east cost starting in Washington D.C. Spreading to Maryland and Virginia. There forces spread like a wild fire no american forces could hold them back. Then it happened Biological weapons fired by american forces.It wasn't contained it spread to the russians but also the citizens it was an untested biological weapon. It was a last straw to do but this was the end.
All who were effected were self contions but just was determined to attack and kill No mercy, no kindness, no nothing. so russians were killing its own forces and were shooting don't citizens it sucked.
It was my goal to get out my parents were in Quarantine 5 i was in 2 with Abe. I went to my mirror i out on my clothes and my shoes i was a dirty blond (at this point you couldn't tell with all the dirt)
I picked up my rifle today was the day i have been saving ammo and weapons from the black market of quarantine 2&3 I have hidden all of my loot but today was the day. i put on my ski mast grabbed my back pack full of supplies to go and live out in the world for a long period of time. My plans were not to shoot down guards and make a conflict the guns were for if i was found. i want to escape ,get my parents, and get the the nearest american out post.  i looked to the door it was time.



21 comments:

  1. Hi Jack this comment is from Christopher and Cheryl We read your story together while we are driving through Arkansas. This was an amazing story!!! We can't believe a nine year old could write such a great story! You are a genius writer, you even included foreshadowing. All the detail in your storytelling made us feel like we were there. We can't wait for the next chapter :). Thanks for sharing!

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  2. Jack, you have a gift. Keep it up, buddy!
    -Kristen

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  3. Jack, clearly you have been raised by a literature obsessed mother and a combat obsessed father. You amaze me. How did I get so lucky to have you as my child? You are the light of my life. Never stop writing. You have no idea how exceptional this is.

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  4. Jack,
    I am blown away by your writing skills...and you are not even a grown up yet! You are going to do big things in your life. I can tell.
    My husband loves to write too. It's his dream. He works hard at it and writes whenever he has time. If this is your dream too-don't give up on it. Dreams come true!
    I'll check back to see your next chapter. Looking forward to it.
    Crystal-a friend from your Mom's Mission

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  5. This is terrific. Thank you for sharing your story with us. If you promise to keep writing, I'll promise to keep reading it. :)

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  6. Jack....I was blown away when you read me the start of this story the other day. I have never met a kid, of any age, with this kind of talent. Heck, most adults don't have this kind of talent. Keep up the amazing work and keep sharing it with us. I'm pretty sure I'm your biggest fan and someday soon, I'll pay to own this book!!

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  7. This is good stuff, Jack. I can't wait for the next chapter and will totally stand in line to get my autographed copy. Keep up the good work.

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  8. Jack,

    This was awesome! What's going to happen with the hay-covered Russian Soldier that doesn't speak English? This sounded better than most adults could have written. Strong work, Jack! Strong work!

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    1. I'm a big fan of Ruchnoch too, Thomas.

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  9. wow, that's really good Jack. I'm impressed.

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  10. WOW Jack!!! You know what? I don't even like to read very much and I LOVE your story! I can't wait to read more as you go! I feel like I am there and I love that it comes from your imagination. You are an incredibly talented boy. I can't wait to show my husband. Keep it up and great job!
    Kiera Ethington

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  11. Jack, that is an amazing story. I believe you have demonstrated that you have been blessed with a real talent.

    Keep writing, keep reading, and keep studying military history...ok the last one is not all that important to improve your skills, but will give you more fodder to write about. As such, I feel I do need to point out the BMP 4 is an Infantry Fighting Vehicle.... :)

    -Dad

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  12. Wow . . you go Jack. Keep writing . . . Can't wait to read the next chapter !!

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  13. Wow Jack! What happens next? Was your home destroyed? Why were your parents all ready in the bunker? Why were the Russians willing to send their nuke and kill their own comrades all ready on the ground? You really sparked my attention. I hope you continue the story! I've got to know what happens next.

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  14. You had me at "my dad was a gun hoarder."

    Nice work!

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  15. Good work, Jack. You have a great imagination and ability to put it to paper. Punch your dad for leaving Abe and you to fend for yourselves.

    Brad Yarbrough

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  16. Jack!
    What a great start to your novel! I was totally hooked. Can't wait to find out what happens. You are awesome.
    Love, Aunt Lisa

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  17. Wow, you are a very talented writer! Great job, Jack!
    Love,
    Sister Greer

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  18. hello! im jack and the new chapter is coming out. and if you play minecraft. i have a post on the new
    update 1.6 :D thanks for every thing! and spread the word about my blog!

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